badgerboy
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Like we could have her have a crush on him and that’s why she lets him out, she just has to tell him like briefly and maybe kiss him and we don’t have to hear from her again.
I don’t know. I don’t want to bring something like that into the script and then just leave it at that. And no way that anyone’s kissing a skeleton.
she tells him she loves him, he freaks, runs away…and there we have a cause to start a war…and when the curse thing is broken he realizes that she actually is beautiful and they get married (but then it would get a little more complicated because we would have to elaborate on her life more, and that would draw away from the main four  )
I like this idea, but it would draw away from the main four, and I don’t think it should cause a war, because the skeletons are pretty much meaningless to the Queen. And remember, they send an army to battle against the King because they want Edward back.
I like that idea. Or it could be the other way around where Edward used to love this woman but she mysteriously disappears one day. A few years later while he is captured by the monsters, he sees one of the girl skeletons at the monster base who resembles a lot like the missing lady.
I wouldn’t want to do this because that still involves him loving a skeleton, which is way too awkward and questionable. I don’t have a problem with a skeleton having a crush on a human though.
Here’s what I think should happen:
The skeleton (who I am temporarily dubbing “Jesse”) has the job of feeding Edward while he’s in a prison cell. This gives them some chance to talk. Jesse develops a crush for Edward (how? I don’t know. He’s not exactly a like-able guy) and one day sets him free. Before he leaves the cell, she tells him that she loves him. Edward is revolted and runs away. Then he meets up with Josh and company somewhere in the cavern and they escape.
Later, during the huge battle, the King’s army is losing horribly. Jesse, who we haven’t seen again until now, is out fighting, and sees Edward battling. Its only a matter of time before he gets taken down. Jesse decides to revolt against the Queen, and the other skeletons quickly follow. Soon, with the help of the skeletons, the Queen’s army is defeated.
Edward, after seeing what Jesse did for him, apologizes. Then all the skeletons revert back to human beings. Then we’ll imply they have a hopeful future together, without directly saying it, because I think that would be lame.
The above scenario would allow us to:
-Develop the back story for the skeletons that leads to their eventual betrayal of the Queen.
-Add a significant character to help explain that back story and advance the plot without taking focus off the main four.
Any thoughts?
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FLIPaBRIK
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wonderful badger, i like it…it’s coming together 
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LegoMasterProductions
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I like it. I really do. How about we just say that Edward and Jesse will just become friends afterward. I don’t think 3 and 4 year olds will want to see romantic stuff, nonetheless younger boys.
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badgerboy
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How about we just say that Edward and Jesse will just become friends afterward.
I was thinking that we leave it ambiguous, so long as the audience knows Edward doesn’t think Jesse is gross.
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FLIPaBRIK
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yes i am totally with you on that one badger :wink
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badgerboy
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Okay, we’re making really good progress, guys. We have a lot of the plot finished, so the only things left (I think) are the content of Point C, which is when Josh and his gang travel from Castleton to the lair of the monsters, what happens when he travels back to Castleton, and the big battle.
What should happen at Point C? If there’s anything that you’d like to see in this film that wouldn’t fit anywhere else, and has no effect on the overall plot, post it for Point C!
As I mentioned somewhere else, I think they should fight a dragon. Maybe they encounter some treacherous robbers.
What kind of monsters should be sent to attack Josh on his way back to Castleton? What should happen during these fights?
I think just normal monsters that are quick and agile. They attack one at a time, but they are a force to be reckoned with and cannot be defeated easily. Anything else would be too slow to catch up with Josh and company.
What should happen during the big battle? If you have ideas for the battle sequence, post them!
I think there should be some archers and a dragon, but I really think there should just be a ton of LEGO men beating the crap out of each other (it wouldn’t be too violent, of course). We would have a few shots of Josh, Edward, Dash, and Rasputin using their abilities to their advantage, and of course, we’d have the skeletons betraying the Queen.
Here’s the way things are going to go from this point forward:
Once we get these points ironed out, I’m going to make another plot summary. Once everyone is happy with that, I’ll work on making a “Rough Draft” of the script. Since this is feature length, I’ll probably require another person to look over my work and maybe write a third or so of the script. But we’ll need to heavily revise it later because I think it’ll show within the script if its written by multiple people. If you’re interested in writing some of the script, send me a PM.
Once the rough draft of the script is finished, I’ll hand the script over to someone else to add some more humor, because I’m only good at writing slapstick humor, and I’d rather this have smart jokes. This will be the “Humor Draft.”
Once the humor is added, we’ll send it to a variety of people to check for grammar mistakes, plot screw-ups, etc., to make sure everything in the script makes sense. Once that’s done, the Humor Draft will have become the “Script.” (I’m giving each phase of the scripting process a different name to keep it clean.)
Once we have the script finished, I guess we’ll move on to whatever comes next….
I don’t know how long this will take, but I know that it won’t be done by Easter. Maybe May, if we’re lucky. June at the latest.
So, let’s finish up the final Discussion Points!
EDIT: And even if this CP does fall apart at some point or another, won’t it be impressive to say that you helped write a feature length script? 
And also, if you are going to apply to become a writer, I’d like you to send a sample of your work with your application, as well as why you’d like to be a writer, what makes you qualified, etc.
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HeAndHimStudios
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For the battle, I think it should go back and forth between sides, with each side getting an advantage that is quickly lost, like a dragon that come in for the Queen’s army, but then another dragon comes thats good and fights for the goos guys. Of, there would be a ton of people beating the crap out of each other, but would it be LOTR scale, or smaller? Nad if smaller, how much smaller?
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The Doctor
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Sounds good from what I can gather, just keep in mind about little kiddies when writing in violence.
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Mousequeso
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“badgerboy” wrote: and the other skeletons quickly follow. Soon, with the help of the skeletons, the Queen’s army is defeated.
Um? hate to rehash. but… WHY? why on earth would all of the skeltons turn on the ‘queen’? there just going to give everything up because of what? they saw one female skelton doing it? IF she jumped off a bridge…
U see my point? there really is NO reason for all of them to switch sides. there is a reason for HER to switch sides. but we need to come up with a reason for all of them to switch sides.
and yes I understand that this movie is for a wide ranging audiance. but, really, that needs to make sense to everybody. cause the little kids would say “well, they turned becuase they wanted to help their friend jesse defeat the evil queen woman who was killing edward”. but we all know that the other skeltons (realistically) wouldnt care about the fact that jesse is doing her own privite revolt.
So basically what Im saying is we need to come up with a ‘reasonable’ reason.
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HeAndHimStudios
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Perhaps they never liked the Queen from the start, and they had secretly been planning amongst themselves to rebel against her. So they just take advantage of the battle to finnaly turn on her.
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badgerboy
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Actually, if you remembered earlier, we established that the skeletons hate the Queen because of a curse she put on them, which makes them skeletons instead of humans, and they feel the only way to survive is to work for her. That is, until, Jesse betrays the Queen and then the rest decide to go along with her so they can be free.
EDIT: Oh, and it dawned on me today that this is going to be a 60+ page script, so chances are I’ll need more than one person to help me write it.
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The Doctor
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“badgerboy” wrote: Oh, and it dawned on me today that this is going to be a 60+ page script, so chances are I’ll need more than one person to help me write it.
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Mousequeso
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“badgerboy” wrote: Actually, if you remembered earlier, we established that the skeletons hate the Queen because of a curse she put on them.
oh… missed that. (dont know how). K, well that will work.
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HeAndHimStudios
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I think it shouldn’t end happily ever after. we shoyld add something at the end to suggest a posible sequel, or that they have more adventures.
I thought long and hard about this part.
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The Doctor
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Badger, do you have that summery of the plot and time estimates?
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