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April 1, 2009 at 3:27 am #407472
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Not yet, I’ve been really busy recently. I’m on spring break now, so I’ll have it up by Sunday, hopefully.

Also, I’d like to know if anybody has any thoughts on the names, mainly Rasputin. Rasputin was some sort of advisor guy to the Russians during (or before) WWI. I’m not sure if we should keep that name or change it.

April 1, 2009 at 2:37 pm #407478
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Rasputin was the guy who helped overthrow the Romanov dynasty in Russia. I think we should keep it. And none of the other names bother me.

April 5, 2009 at 4:22 pm #407582
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So, when will the summary be ready? When ever we have a summary, I can help with the script. I work good if I have an outline that I can follow.

April 5, 2009 at 9:28 pm #407589
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I don’t know what time zone badger is in, but it’s Monday here so I assume he’s going to upload it soon as it’s probably Sunday for him.

April 5, 2009 at 9:39 pm #407590
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OK, it’s just it’s sunday here, and I have nothing to do.I just sit on my computer waiting for someone to get into the chat room and talk to. Hint Hint

April 12, 2009 at 3:22 am #407803
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Woah boy, its finished. Please read carefully to make sure that I didn’t make any plot holes. I added and changed some things, hopefully they won’t be too major. Tell me what you think.

Also, I’ll be out of town for most of tomorrow, so I probably won’t be able to respond until tomorrow night.

Character Descriptions:
MAJOR CHARACTERS:

Josh: Josh is a poor, unloved farm boy living in Castleton. He lives with his family consisting of a mother, father, and sister. Josh is an outcast in his own home, because of his unique ability to control and create matter. His family sees him as a freak.

Josh is shy and isn’t very brave, but throughout the film he transforms into a heroic person.

Rasputin: Rasputin is the king’s advisor. He reports Josh’s amazing abilities to the king, which sets the plot in motion. Rasputin is knowledgeable and fatherly, yet reclusive. Throughout the story, Rasputin learns how to open up and befriend people.

Dash: Dash is charming, charismatic, and very persuasive. He is a knight in shining armor, the dream husband of all females. However, a lot of bravery shown by Dash is really just bragging and small deeds made to be larger than they are. He has convinced himself he is the greatest hero of all time, but now he is beginning to doubt that, until his self-esteem completed diminishes and he couldn’t save a fly. Dash soon learns about being a hero, and that’s its about helping other people, not the rewards.

Edward: Edward is the King’s thief, but he has recently been captured by a group of monsters. Edward is sarcastic and cunning, providing some great humor. Edward goes through the least character development in the film, but that is mainly because of his hard-headed personality.

Queen: The monster Queen is a beautiful, yet slightly ugly, monster that rules all the other monsters in her domain. She can shape-shift into many different creatures, but always reverts back to her humanoid form. She is pure evil, yet performs acts of mercy towards her prisoners by allowing them to become slaves instead of being executed.

MINOR CHARACTERS:

Jesse: Jesse is a skeleton that forms a crush for Edward while he is imprisoned by the Queen. Jesse, like all other skeletons, is being forced to work for the Queen because of an ancient pact that demands that they obey her command. They are skeletons because of a curse put on them by the Queen herself because she wants them to be as miserable as possible.

The King: The King of Castleton is a heavy man that enjoys food. He controls his kingdom as if it were a game of chess, constantly making references to the game. However, he would sacrifice everything for his kingdom.

ACT I – The Pre-Adventure:

The film starts on Josh’s farm as he is going through his daily routine. The opening credits will appear on screen during this short segment. When the sun is setting and Josh believes that he is finished, his father comes over and throws a bucket at him.

Josh’s father demands that Josh cleans the horse droppings up. This point finishes the opening credits.

Josh enters the barn and brings a horse out of its stable so he can clean it up. Josh makes the droppings levitate, and then drops it in a bucket. He does this for a few other horses, and then his mother walks in and scolds him by making cruel remarks. She doesn’t want him using his ability at all. She shoves him into the droppings.

The next day, Josh wakes up and gets dressed and discovers that his parents have left town and his sister is left to take care of him. She demands that he makes her breakfast, but Josh refuses. After some arguing, Josh overpowers her and leaves their house. Josh’s sister is disgusted.

Josh heads into town and after a few shots establishing what the town is like (dirty and grimy) Josh comes upon a street magician. Clearly inspired by the idea, Josh finds a wooden board and some mud and “paints” “Street Magician” on it and sets it up across the street from the other magician. While painting the board, Josh talks to himself about how he hopes that bringing in some money will get his parents to love him.

The opposing magician is obviously annoyed, so the two try to out-do each other until Josh finally reveals his ability to the growing crowd. At this point, all the crowd throws money into Josh’s cup and they applaud. The other magician, in disgust, kicks over his stand. A figure in the shadows (Rasputin) leaves the area.

That evening, Josh is in his dining room eating something when there is a knock on the door. His parents still aren’t home. Josh’s sister answers it. A soldier is there, asking for Josh. She says that he can take the brat away. And so Josh reluctantly leaves the house (because he has no idea why the soldier wants him) and heads toward the castle.

In the castle, Josh is introduced to the King. Next to the King is Rasputin and a knight (Dash). The King explains why he wants Josh to be here. He reveals that Rasputin reported his powers to the King and that they might be the type of thing the King needs. He says that his royal thief, Edward, was captured while on a mission by a large group of monsters and that he needs him back immediately because another kingdom might go to war with the King’s kingdom and he needs valuable information on the other kingdom.

The King says that he will give Josh anything he wants if he brings Edward back. Josh, hoping to get money to buy his parents’ love, accepts immediately.

The King explains that he won’t be going on this mission alone. Joining him will be Rasputin, introduced by the king, followed by a friendly “greetings” from Rasputin. The King goes to introduce Dash, but interrupts the King by cockily saying, “Dash the heroic knight, here to serve the King and save the country.”

After giving Josh some basic guidelines (go here, Edward should be in a jail, bring him back without making any stops) he tells him to meet Dash and Rasputin outside the castle in the morning before they depart.

The next morning, they leave the kingdom and go on their journey.

ACT II – The Adventure:

Before traveling too far, Josh and his group stop at a small village (and I mean small) to get some food. They end up talking about themselves. Josh talks about his farm life (leaving out the parts concerning his abusive family), Rasputin talks very little, only mentioning that he lives with the King and it gets lonely (leaving out that he is a recluse) and Dash brags about his acts of heroism, which really aren’t so great.

Then they go on their way.

Now, the film switches over to the perspective of Edward, who is sitting in a jail cell in a cavern. He is alone until a female skeleton, Jesse, comes over and talks to him. She gives him a small amount of food and makes some small conversation before leaving. Edward makes some sarcastic remarks. Using a bone from his chicken, Edward tries to pick the lock on his cell’s gate, but a guard catches him and takes it away from him, and then mocks Edward, which only increases Edward’s determination.

Back to Josh and co.’s perspective, they are now in a forest. They come across a small group of monsters who run away, the group chases them, and then after a small fight, they are defeated. Rasputin comments that that must mean they are on the right way.

After a musical montage of some things they did following that, they come across a dragon’s cave during the evening. The dragon is sleeping at the edge of its cave. The group tries to sneak past, but the beast wakes up.

The group fights the dragon. The dragon never flies, sticking to ground combat. The three use their abilities to fight it (Josh sends rocks flying at it, Dash uses a sword, while Rasputin directs them to weak spots). At one point, Josh becomes trapped under one of his own boulders, and the dragon goes to crush him. Rasputin is yelling at Dash and telling him to do something, but Dash is too frightened. Josh finally manages to get the boulder off of himself and throw it on top of the dragon, finally knocking it unconscious. The three go further into the woods and settle for the night.

Here, Rasputin confronts Dash about what happened back in the battle. Rasputin believes that Dash, being a knight, should’ve done something, but Dash said Rasputin should’ve done something himself. Josh finally quiets them both down and goes to sit down somewhere else.

Rasputin falls asleep fast, but Dash and Josh can’t fall asleep. They end up talking. Dash reveals to Josh that Dash has self-esteem issues, and only brags about his small acts of kindness to make himself fell better, and that he isn’t a really good knight at all. Josh encourages him to do better. They fall asleep.

The next day, the group finally reaches an abandoned settlement. In the center of it is a tunnel heading down into the monsters’ cavern. They go in.

Switching back to Edward’s point of view, Edward is sitting in his cell. Jesse comes up to the cell again and says how she’s really enjoyed their conversations the past week. Edward sarcastically says “Me too,” and then asks Jesse why she’s a skeleton, and Jesse tells him the story of the ancient pact and the curse, explained in Jesse’s character description. Jesse lets him out of the cell. Edward is shocked, but before he leaves, she says, “You know, Ed, I kind of…like you, you know, a lot.” Edward is disgusted and runs away, leaving Jesse sad and depressed.

Back to Josh, Josh and his gang stealthily move through the caverns, having to confront the monsters very few times. Eventually they find Edward meandering through the cavern. The group is excited to have found Edward, but Edward is kind of blasé about it. They are quickly detected by the monsters and try to fight their way out of the cavern, and soon they reach a large room with a ton of monsters in it. The Queen is on a raised platform and says that they’ll never leave alive, and that they will be hunted until Edward is returned to her. They refuse to give up, and fight their way through the room, barely making it out alive. They just run away at this point.

They reach the last tunnel before the exit. Hundreds of monsters are behind them, unseen, only their voices letting the viewer know they’re there. Dash tells the group to run ahead, and he’ll hold off the monsters. Josh refuses to let that happen, and Dash replies, “What kind of knight would I be if I let you die? I’m a knight, a hero. And if I have that title, I need to live up to it.” Josh nods and understands that Dash needs to do this for himself. Josh, Rasputin and Edward run away while Dash stays to hold the monsters off.

The monsters come running at Dash, who begins fighting him. He holds them off for a bit, but is then overpowered. His fate is left unknown, but it is strongly implied that he dies here.

The monsters finally exit the cavern to see nobody around. Dash bought them just enough time to escape.

Back in the caverns, one of the Queen’s monsters reports to her that the group has gotten away. She tells him to release the “Hunters,” because if they don’t, they’ll never be able to use Edward to retrieve the Ancient Emblem, an object that will give its holder unlimited strength. It was theirs, until it was stolen by Castleton’s rival kingdom (the same one considering going to war with Castleton.)

Rasputin feels horrible about what he said to Dash. “And the worse part is, he might never know I’m sorry.” Josh tries to make him feel better, but nothing works.

On the way back, the group of three runs into three enforcers, one at a time. They are powerful and hard to defeat, but they defeat each one. Rasputin also opens up to Josh about him being reclusive, and Rasputin starts to become more fatherly to Josh. They finally make it back home.

When the King finally sees the thief, he is very, very pleased, but is dismayed to know that Dash didn’t make it back. The King is then alerted that they are being attacked by a large group of monsters.

ACT III – The Battle:

The King quickly deploys all of his soldiers onto the battlefield. Josh willingly heads out into battle along with Rasputin. Edward says that he will help his own way.

The battle scene. There are several shots of the soldiers and monsters fighting, each showing different parts of the battle, which takes place in an open field outside Castleton. There are also many shots focusing on Josh using his matter manipulation powers to defeat enemies, Rasputin using tricks and a small dagger to defeat enemies, and Edward, who crawls underground a pull enemies under. Castleton is losing the battle.

At one point, Edward comes above ground and is spotted by Jesse. A nearby monster goes to attack Edward, but Jesse attacks the monster and defeats him. She then turns on the monsters, seeing this as a perfect time to overthrow the Queen. The other skeletons follow her lead. With the help of the skeletons, the army is quickly being defeated. The Queen is distraught.

Josh runs towards the Queen and then splits open the earth beneath her, making her fall into a deep pit.

The monsters witness this event, and run away. Within seconds, the skeletons turn back into humans. Edward, in shock that Jesse saved his life after he was so mean to her, confronts her and says, “Jesse…I’m sorry.” They look into each other’s eyes.

The King congratulates Josh on a job well done. When asked what he wants, Josh replies nothing. He found everything he wanted on his adventure. Bravery, forgiveness and love. Rasputin becomes the father of Josh.

The end.

Also, I’ll admit that most of the time I hadn’t even touched the plot summary, but I was still thinking about it! :)

April 12, 2009 at 3:26 am #407806
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HOORAY! I CAN GET TO WORK!

April 12, 2009 at 3:33 am #407807
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One last question badger, do you want it in modern speak, or medevil(Can’t speel it right now.)?

April 12, 2009 at 5:48 pm #407812
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“HeAndHimStudios” wrote: HOORAY! I CAN GET TO WORK!

i’ll be working on it aswell and then once we finish it we can kinda combine the best of each together to make an awesome script!

April 12, 2009 at 7:26 pm #407814
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New thread started thank badger.

April 12, 2009 at 8:17 pm #407819
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Possible script for Act. 1

The film starts on Josh’s farm as he is going through his daily routine. The opening credits will appear on screen during this short segment. When the sun is setting and Josh believes that he is finished, his father comes over and throws a bucket at him.

Josh (to himself): finally, that’s the last of it!

Father: what do you think your doing?! Get back to work!

Josh: but father, what else is there left to do?

Josh’s father demands that Josh cleans the horse droppings up. This point finishes the opening credits.

Josh enters the barn and brings a horse out of its stable so he can clean it up. Josh makes the droppings levitate, and then drops it in a bucket. He does this for a few other horses, and then his mother walks in and scolds him by making cruel remarks. She doesn’t want him using his ability at all. She shoves him into the droppings.

Father: take this (tosses bucket) and go pick up the horse scum, I want to see a spotless stable by morning!

Josh (quietly to horse): come on (name of horse here) that’s a good girl.
(josh begins levitating the poo)

mother: oh! The nerve of ye! That is unacceptable behavior! You will surely be found out and decapitated! That is great evil what you are practicing!

The next day, Josh wakes up and gets dressed and discovers that his parents have left town and his sister is left to take care of him. She demands that he makes her breakfast, but Josh refuses. After some arguing, Josh overpowers her and leaves their house. Josh’s sister is disgusted.

Josh (to his sister): where is father?

Sister: they have left us. now you are to respond to me, and I will have none of your foolishness under this roof! Is that clear?! Now make me my breakfast kid!

Josh: you are plenty capable of cooking something up yourself!

Sister: why you filthy little worm! You are going to make me my meal and that will be the end of this nonsense!

Josh: oh yes that’s right, you have never worked a day in your pitiful life, how would you possibly know how to cook! (Walks off)

Sister: come back here! You can’t just leave! (grabs him and turns him around) all I am asking is that you make me some breakfast!

Josh (calming down just a bit): there are eggs in the coop, and I milked the cow last night. Now go along and fend for yourself!

Sister: aaaaaaaggghhh!
(And walks off)

Josh heads into town and after a few shots establishing what the town is like (dirty and grimy) Josh comes upon a street magician. Clearly inspired by the idea, Josh finds a wooden board and some mud and “paints” “Street Magician” on it and sets it up across the street from the other magician. While painting the board, Josh talks to himself about how he hopes that bringing in some money will get his parents to love him.

Josh: hello, may I ask what you are doing?

Magician: unless you have money, which judging by your appearance, you do not, I suggest you just run along before you are missed.

Josh: you are right I have no money, but no I will not be missed.(sadly looks at the magician)

magician (feeling pity for josh): fine, I suppose I could spare a minute. (shows josh a trick)

Josh (clearly mystified): bravo! Bravo!

Magician: okay you had your fun, now run along kid.

Josh (to himself as he walks away): I could do that. I just need a couple of things…(proceeds to finding what he needs) this should do (when he finds the board)…now if I could only get a good crowd, I could get plenty of money and maybe my family would accept me.

The opposing magician is obviously annoyed, so the two try to out-do each other until Josh finally reveals his ability to the growing crowd. At this point, all the crowd throws money into Josh’s cup and they applaud. The other magician, in disgust, kicks over his stand. A figure in the shadows (Rasputin) leaves the area.

(the trying to out do one another should be done without words…kind of like the pixar shorts before each movie, but have the right kind of music to set the mood, I think it would add a lot)

That evening, Josh is in his dining room eating something when there is a knock on the door. His parents still aren’t home. Josh’s sister answers it. A soldier is there, asking for Josh. She says that he can take the brat away. And so Josh reluctantly leaves the house (because he has no idea why the soldier wants him) and heads toward the castle.

Sister: well hello what can I do for you.

Soldier: I am under strict orders to find a boy named josh who is said to live in this house, may I see him?

Sister: what did the brat do this time?!

Soldier: that is for me to know and for Josh to find out, now if you don’t mind I must speak with him.

Sister: sure, do me a favor and keep the brat if you’d like.

Soldier: that is exactly why I am here (josh appears) oh, you must be josh (josh merely nods) I have direct orders from the king to seize you and bring you before him, you have no choice in the matter, now go get your belongings and we will be on our way.

Josh: what have I done to deserve this?

Soldier: those are not my words to speak, but I assure you that you will find out in due timing.

In the castle, Josh is introduced to the King. Next to the King is Rasputin and a knight (Dash). The King explains why he wants Josh to be here. He reveals that Rasputin reported his powers to the King and that they might be the type of thing the King needs. He says that his royal thief, Edward, was captured while on a mission by a large group of monsters and that he needs him back immediately because another kingdom might go to war with the King’s kingdom and he needs valuable information on the other kingdom.

Soldier: your highness, the boy is here. (and disappears)

King: Josh, there is no reason to be frightened. On the contrary, you have been chosen to carry out a very important assignment and you should be proud. We have seen what you have done in the town, and have decided that we need you.

Josh: but I am a mere farm boy, how could I possibly be chosen for something important!

Dash: you should know better than to address the king in such fashion! Here let me give you an example of how it is done….you’re majesty…

King: Dash!! that will be enough, he is the chosen one and you owe him your respect, but yes josh in the future more etiquette would be appreciated, when addressing a noble.

Josh: sorry your majesty, it was not my intention, but I am nothing but farm scum, dirt.

King: no, you are not. Rasputin here has reported to me what he has seen, and you would be insulting his dignity to say one more thing against yourself. But like I was saying you have been chosen and now I will give you the details of your assignment, but not before we have a bite to eat!

After some long seconds of the king eating while the others look on…

The King explains that he won’t be going on this mission alone. Joining him will be Rasputin, introduced by the king, followed by a friendly “greetings” from Rasputin. The King goes to introduce Dash, but interrupts the King by cockily saying, “Dash the heroic knight, here to serve the King and save the country.”

After giving Josh some basic guidelines (go here, Edward should be in a jail, bring him back without making any stops) he tells him to meet Dash and Rasputin outside the castle in the morning before they depart.

The next morning, they leave the kingdom and go on their journey.

King: As you are most likely aware of, our wonderful kingdom has not been at war since my father’s grandfather was king. But now something has occurred that could easily upset that, and bring danger and unrest to our townsfolk. My royal appointed thief is being held hostage!-

Dash: the thief has been thieved! Hahaha-

King: silence!!! this is no laughing matter Dash!

Dash: forgive me your majesty.

King: like I said My thief is being held hostage under the power of (the evil queen?) and we need your help to retrieve him without starting a war.

Josh: Your highness, the most I have ever been in charge of, is my father’s horses, and now you ask me to single-handedly go to the ends of the earth and unleash the wrath of a horde of monsters so that you can know some secrets? I’m sorry but last I checked…i can’t even kill a pig for food without feeling sick.

Rasputin: my child, do not fear, you shall not go alone. Dash and I have been appointed to join you on this journey, whether we live or perish you will not have to face this on your own.

King: and it seems to me josh, that you still don’t know the danger this will help us to avoid, I do not want my thief back just for him to whisper in my ear the latest town gossip passed around by your mother at the well! He has much knowledge about a certain kingdom that has recently been showing signs of betrayal. If you fail this task we will be at war with both kingdoms, and if you don’t even try we will be razed to the ground by one nation. But if you succeed, there will be no unnecessary bloodshed and everyone will be able to live at peace with each other. No I am not asking you to do this if you do not want to…it is an ORDER!

Josh: I cannot do this!

King: well if you can’t be ordered to do something, I will bribe you…once you complete this mission, you will live like a royal. There will be none other greater than you except for me. You will have all you want.

Josh: I will do this then, although I know I will surely die, there is always hope.

King: Alright then! Now that we have that settled, these are your new partners…Rasputin, my chief advisor and best friend will assist you with all the knowledge of the land, and anything you will need to know.

Rasputin: all the wisdom I have within me is at your service young ruler, and I will not be your guide and teacher as much as your devoted servant.

King: and…

Dash: Dash, the heroic and charming knight, here to save the day and serve thy highness. I will lay my life down for you, although the time will never come when Dashiel son of Agronius is defeated!

King:…will assist you with brawn and arrogance. You are to report to me here tomorrow first thing in the morning.

April 12, 2009 at 8:20 pm #407820
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Woah boy, before anybody gets started on writing anything we need to organize who wants to write what parts and stuff like that. I think it will move quicker and the result will hopefully turn out better this way than everybody writing a script.

And I don’t believe I ever assigned anybody to be a writer, becuase nobody ever sent me a sample of their best work. If you want to be a writer, send me a sample of your best work (or write something completely new, it doesn’t matter). It has to be a screenplay. I don’t really care about proper formatting.

Also, does anybody have anything to say at all? Like, about character deaths? Did I handle them properly? Any other changes you think should be made? What did you think of it overall?

Nobody starts writing until I say so, guys, remember that :wink I want to make this move as efficiently as possible.

Once I get samples from everyone interested, we’ll organize who is going to write what parts based on your personal strengths and what you would personally want to write (but this won’t affect what you end up writing as much). Hopefully this will be done by Tues.

I’d prefer modern speak, HeandHim.

April 12, 2009 at 8:22 pm #407822
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OK, just wondering, and I’m not the best at writing battle scenes. That ius really the only thing.

April 12, 2009 at 8:24 pm #407823
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“badgerboy” wrote: Woah boy, before anybody gets started on writing anything we need to organize who wants to write what parts and stuff like that. I think it will move quicker and the result will hopefully turn out better this way than everybody writing a script.

And I don’t believe I ever assigned anybody to be a writer, becuase nobody ever sent me a sample of their best work. If you want to be a writer, send me a sample of your best work (or write something completely new, it doesn’t matter). It has to be a screenplay. I don’t really care about proper formatting.

Also, does anybody have anything to say at all? Like, about character deaths? Did I handle them properly? Any other changes you think should be made? What did you think of it overall?

Nobody starts writing until I say so, guys, remember that :wink I want to make this move as efficiently as possible.

Once I get samples from everyone interested, we’ll organize who is going to write what parts based on your personal strengths and what you would personally want to write (but this won’t affect what you end up writing as much). Hopefully this will be done by Tues.

I’d prefer modern speak, HeandHim.

so sorry badger, i guess i just got a little ambitious :?
can what i posted be a smple thing for trying out?

and again sorry for the huge post without your go ahead :|

April 12, 2009 at 8:29 pm #407825
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Its okay guys, don’t worry.

Yes, that can be your sample. I have some thought about it, but I’ll save it for later when I have more time to write.

If you could post what scenes you would prefer doing, that’d be a great help. I’ll organize us then as soon as HeandHim sends me a sample. Any chance you’ll be able to get that sample to me by tomorrow?

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